怎么写游记
罗列理由→挖掘深意→确定地点(前两点基础上)
头脑风暴 topic: Traveling √Choice1 记叙文 Choice2 议论文
记叙文:大多数人会选择写记叙文,但如果能够想到一个与众不同,令人印象深刻的地点,并最后在精神/感受层面拔高,文章就还不错。
议论文:好出彩,与众不同。旅行好/不好,出国游好/国内游好,注意提炼主题。
实例分析1
An unforgettable trip
I ever went to the yellow mountain October in 2003.then I fancied the beautiful prospect of
the mountain before I climbed up it and I longed for the doings.
The second day I got up at six and went to the bus at half past six, and we set out at seven from Nanjing. About at 1:00 pm, we arrived at the foot of the yellow mountain. Firstly we started
to have lunch, and we multiplied a cable car at the middle peak which people call it as liehua peak after we have a full food. Then we beginning to climb up really, when I reach the peak about four hours, I looked down at the perspectives and I forgot the position myself. However I saw the sunrise unforgettably in the second morning, and I thought of the old idiom: limitless landscapes at the dangerous pinnacles.
In short, I love beautiful rivers and mountains in our country. And I don't forget this trip.
问题:1很少有复合句结构;2地点大家都很熟悉,黄山,千篇一律难出彩;3语法错误(阴影处)About at 1:00 pm → At About 1:00 pm reach→reached
注:语法错误多,印象分会降2-3分。
实例分析2
假如你上周末参加了某旅行社组织的所谓生态游,你觉得名不副实。请你根据把自己经历的这次生态游和对真正生态游的看法写出来。
生态游:在旅行当中亲近大自然。
例文1
Last weekend I went on an eco-travel with a travel agency. All the way we enjoyed the beautiful scenery and fresh air. But a few of us picked flowers as/while going sightseeing. Some even tried to catch the birds they saw. What was worse, many tourists threw rubbish here and there. The rubbish may do harm to wildlife there. I don’t think this is a true eco-travel. A true eco-travel is a tour that not only allows us to express our love for nature, but needs our responsibility as well. As we enjoy the beauty of nature, we should try our best to protect it. And we should also try to protect wildlife. A true eco-travel should be like this: take nothing away but your good memory; leave nothing behind but all the green trees and the clean water.
评析:文章更读起来更顺(语感,通过大量阅读获得),最后一句很好。
例文2
The Dream of Traveling Abroad
When I learned English, I had no idea why would I learn it, but as I was in high school, my English teacher showed me many things about the foreign country, then I came to know what the foreign country was like. They are so different from China, the world is so big, I must travel abroad someday, I want to see the other countries, having access to their tradition. I am very interested in the culture, I know our country’s culture well, I want to know more beyond China. learn that Paris is very fashionable, Egypt is an old city with its famous tower, Venice is a water city, all of there are so interesting to me. English is a basic tool that I can communicate with the world, so I must learn English well, making enough money and realize my dream.
例文3
My Plan for Journey
This month, I will travel to Changsha and Zhangjiajie with my two friends, which is supposed to be a seven-day trip. We will set out on 10th, June. Now, we have prepared many things, snacks and medicines included. Firstly, we will go to Changsha by plane. The tickets are cheap, so it’s a good choice to save time. We will stay there for two days. The main goal staying there is to enjoy the delicious food in Changsha. My friend has prepared a map of must-tries and I believe they must be good. Then we will go to Zhangjiajie by train. It’s not so far from Changsha, taking about five hours to get there. Zhangjiajie is famous for its wonderful mountains. The sceneries there are amazing that no one should miss. But we will have a tough journey for climbing high mountains, which is not easy for us all. This is why we will stay there for longer. In the end, we will go home by train. This is my plan for the journey. I am sure it will be a wonderful and fruitful journey.
When it comes to travelling, different people will have different opinions. Someone likes to travel alone, while others prefer to travel with a companion. As for me, whether travelling alone or with a companion can bring us a lot of fun.
The main reason why we travel is, of course, for pleasure. It will be a good choice for everyone to travel after studying hard throughout the weekdays. We can find a widened trip to the nearby mountains or beaches for relaxation. Moreover, spending an annual holiday travelling abroad is a satisfying experience for those who don't have many opportunities to be away from their homelands. When they return from their travel, they will feel more energetic to get ready for study or work.
Travelling is also one of the most feasible means for learning. We may have read or heard about something that is related to the place where we plan to go, but we can never get an accurate picture of it until we see it ourselves. Seeing is believing. Besides, we are capable of learning about the geography, biology, and history of the places we visit. No matter what we have learned from class, there's always a lot more for us to learn by travelling.
To sum up, travelling can ease ourselves during some holidays. It can make us acquire
something that we can't learn at school.
评析:平时练笔写的作文,可以学习其句子结构。但是内容比较单一,平铺直叙。